Any Resume Pros Here?

[Perlmudder]

So I have pretty much determined that I am not going to be able to sublet my place here at school next semester. I figure if I am going to be here for the next couple months, I wanna try and find a decent job. My plan is to work here until the spring, move back to Toronto/Cottage for the summer and teach private swim lessons, and then in the fall I am going back to school for real estate.

So I was working on my resume a bit tonight, figured I would spruce it up a bit. I am going to apply for a job as an aquatics manager at the Guelph YMCA.

http://www.guelphy.org/Home/Workwithus/JobListings/tabid/94/Default.aspx

Anybody see any issues with it?

Thanx!

 

[BBB725]

I would ask fund razor

 

[Perlmudder]

I think the grammar and English is alright, I more just want some opinions if people think I have a chance of getting the job.

 

[sledge]

Not a pro but...
Lose the Highlights section, incorporate that into the cover letter(if not already there).
Consider losing the one year of college. If you didn't get a degree, it's not worth mentioning in this instance. Besides, you changed your major and that's not worth advertising.
Not sure if there's a difference "up there" , but typically anything with dates/timelines is done "reverse chronological" meaning the most recent stuff comes first. So consider switching your Education and Experience sections around.
With those changes you might be able to get it all on one page. So you'll have first page cover letter, second page resume, third page references.
Good luck.

 

[Chris]

Your leadoff is stuff that everyone puts on their resume. Put something different there- something that will catch someone's attention. Something that makes you interesting enough to want to talk to for 10 minutes. EVERYONE is dependable and responsible- on paper.

Next, move your experience up and your education down. I want to know what you can do, not whether or not you stumbled through high school. And move the best to the top- you have a degree. Tell them that. They'll assume you went to high school since the college let you in.

Now, on your experience, tell a story. Bullet points are BORING. Tell why you were the best at something or how you used your head. Anyone that reads resumes can tell when a whole paragraph that starts with "effectively and efficiently communicates with staff and customer..." means you answered the phone at lunch.

You want a job? You need to make the person want to see you. And to do that you have to be unique. The resume you have is universally interchangeable with every other on that will pass the hiring authority's desk.

 

[fund razor]

Not a pro but...
Lose the Highlights section, incorporate that into the cover letter(if not already there).
Consider losing the one year of college. If you didn't get a degree, it's not worth mentioning in this instance. Besides, you changed your major and that's not worth advertising.
Not sure if there's a difference "up there" , but typically anything with dates/timelines is done "reverse chronological" meaning the most recent stuff comes first. So consider switching your Education and Experience sections around.
With those changes you might be able to get it all on one page. So you'll have first page cover letter, second page resume, third page references.
Good luck.

Great advice. Those were my initial thoughts too.

I am thankful that for the last few years I have a 1:1:1 ratio... (One interview and job offer per resume sent.)
My Dad, who was a HR Director... told me that it's all about the cover letter, and that you use the cover letter to get an interview, and the interview to get the job.
There is a way that you can inter-weave the "experience" part with some "responsibilities."
I would be happy... if you would like, to send some things back and forth by email. Could send some samples and help with a cover letter. The cover letter may be more important than the resume to some employers.

Good luck. PM me if you have any questions or anything.

 

[fund razor]

You want a job? You need to make the person want to see you.

That could be a chapter title in the book.

 

[HiZ]

I have been working to fine tune my Resume and I think that everyone has to put their own twist and make a format that fits them. Especially when you have a position that incorporates tasks involving that. I shy away from templates etc. and use many of them for a key and take points from each one. I think that you have to tune your resume for each position applied for and remember your "audience" especially with the job market there are going to most likely be many applying for the postition you are.
My views on your resume:
-Make them want to see you yes, but you have to figure out how to market yourself on a way to reach that goal.
-Your opening sounds good but not original. Try putting something that shows a passion or a drive. Something that catches the readers eye. Not just Hey I'm good and come in everyday. These things are expected.
-Space with bullet points on the keys, think of reading a stack of these and yours in 3/4 of the way down. It will get repetative to the person reading it. So, list and limit your key points Try the employer on the left side with Time worked there and then key points.
-Be original and don't put a Summary title on your Mission/Opening statement
-Put your referances on a seperate sheet and try to come up with more than just the min 3 people
-Work experiances first, then Edjucation and Certs, employers want to know what you have done and then what you have learned.
-Remember this is time to talk about yourself, seem like a person not a template or "robot" like it is taken directly from a text book.
-This is your AD, post up and get multiple opinions and take what you like from each one!

 

[Wobble]

I'd also find a way emphasize safety given the job you are after

 

[cuda]

Why don't you persue a career that you have the degree in? A lot of realtors are starving to death now days.